Can someone please read my essay? The Outsiders?

sparadic, you need to reword and strongly state your thesis with points. Make sure you intorduce each and every quote. You seem to float away from your thesis change your thesis to explain how the theme is incorporated through the dyeing of Ponyboy's hair dyeing. Also for eighth grade that is a really short essay. Unless it is supposed to be that short make it 5 paragraphs and about a page and a half so that you can build your case instead of just throwing things out there.